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Friday, September 18, 2015

YA Sci-Fi Needs to Raise More Awareness for Human Endeavor -- And Here's Why




*originally published January 2015*


Aside from Contemporary Young Adult Fiction, YA Sci-Fi is arguably one of the most popular genres of books out there. It comes in all shapes and sizes: Beth Revis' Across the Universe, Suzanne Collins' The Hunger Games, Veroncia Roth's Divergent, Marie Lu's Legend, Allie Condie's Matched... The list goes on and on and on AND ON.

What do all of these books/series have in common?

Humanity (or some part of it) has endured some apocalyptic event.

All those stories are about fighting against impossible odds in a world ravaged by the dark side of nature, or wartorn cities/landscapes, or corrupt governments that have all the citizens in their pockets.

Basically, humanity screwed up and now they're facing the consequences.

But while all of that makes for an action-packed thriller, giving the people in the book the hope that they will live another day...what does it actually do for us, the readers? How are we able to relate to this world, a world so destroyed that recovering it seems inconceivable -- and it is a preposterous notion. Should I mention that although these series end right at the point of the main conflicts, it's ridiculous to think that humanity as a species will survive very long after the story. They don't have the same resource-rich environments to pull from that their ancestors did, so to think that any manageable, enduring, industrious civilization could be constructed is, in essence, a lost cause.

Of course, looking at it like that is probably in the overkill range.

But despite the "rising from the ashes" trope, where humanity has endured this apocalyptic event and managed to get through the worst of it, what do we the readers get out of it? When we read those books, we're stuck rooting for those characters. "Woohoo! They made it out alive! I'm so proud of them!"

Do you see the problem with this in the long run?

Because YA genre fiction is so big in today's society, and most of it consists of these post-apocalyptic, rising from the ashes scenarios, that we collectively associate hope and pride and better futures with these scenarios. We sit back, enjoy the show, and go on with our own lives while imagining how cool it would be to experience those societies.

People, no. It would not be fun to watch your friends die, be controlled by the government, live in a police state, have only one personality, have arranged marriages and punished for breaking them, etc etc etc. Think about those realities, and what they say about humanity, and how humanity got into those scenarios. Humanity had to fall. Humanity had to destroy itself. Citizen slavery had to take hold. The "brighter futures"  of those stories are the "normal lives" of reality.

These stories inspire us, yes, but to do what? Hopefully to avoid these situations. But where do we go from there? What are we as a society supposed to aspire to after reading these books? Sure, we look around and see similar instances around the world that mimic these books, so we point our fingers and shout, "AHA! The Hunger Games is practically real! We need a symbol!"

To be clear, I have nothing against these stories. I enjoyed reading dystopians...when only a few books were dystopians. Now it's so diluted that a lot of people can't imagine our society doing anything but spiraling out of control. Yes, there's a problem with the real world. Yes, we need to be aware of this problem and stand up against our governments when they slap us in the face...but again I ask, where do we go from there?

SO WHAT CAN YOUNG ADULT SCI-FI DO TO CHANGE THIS?

50 years ago, the science-fiction genre showed us incredible technologies like space ships, devices through which you could communicate wirelessly, an invisible network that anyone anywhere in the world could access, robots, AI, heck, even self-tying shoelaces.

And what happened? We got cell phones, the internet, robots, AI, space ships, and, right on time in 2015, self-tying shoelaces....all because of science-fiction!!! Science-fiction inspired the creation of these technologies, filled us with wonder and awe and made us dream of futuristic cities and holograms! Hell, even the space program flourished in the time when dreams of science-fiction dominated culture (we'll skip over War of the Worlds...hopefully that doesn't happen).

But do you see what happened? Science-fiction inspired people to look forward to the future! We didn't hope to break free of a corrupt government. We were united, and sought to advance the entire species! More than half of all modern technology was inspired by science-fiction and space exploration (seriously, no computers, no toasters, no cell phones, no fluorescent light bulbs, no fiber optics...etc etc etc).

Now we have cat videos, memes, and visions of war-torn, post-apocalyptic, bombed-out cities where humanity is struggling to survive.

And why? Because those scenarios DOMINATE the YA genre.

Is this reversible? My answer: an adamant YES. How, you ask?

Add to the YA genre. Dilute the visions of the dystopias.

Let's have more stories celebrating human endeavor. Show our ingenuity, our desire to explore, our passion for knowledge, our yearning to survive where no one has ever survived before. Take us on a journey across the stars, show how rewarding space exploration can be. Give humanity the reputation of uniting, overcoming nature, and surviving on that planet where the air is toxic, there's no natural food, not a tree in sight....

And yet we live there anyway.

We build a home. We claim it as ours. We don't survive -- we thrive. We use technology to our species' advantage. We mine asteroids, walk on comets, discover organic life elsewhere in the universe (and NOT a far-superior alien race that seeks to destroy us). Maybe the life doesn't depend on water to survive, but methane, or hydrochloric acid, or something weird that isn't life as we know it.

We want to see glass raining from the sky, purple and blue trees in the forest, ugly alien animals that are so spectacular we study their habitats and biologies and how they live... We travel to the centers of stars, measure dark matter, even figure out how gravity works (because as of yet, we have NO IDEA HOW GRAVITY WORKS. We know it's related to mass and distance, but after that...nobody knows).

See, now more than ever we need stories that showcase the spirit of human endeavor. We need the unity, the awareness, the sense of wonder and awe that the world shared 50 years ago. If science-fiction from 50 years ago inspired our modern generation of technology and space programs, just imagine what we could achieve today and in the next 10-20 years. We're talking exponential technological growth. Settlements on the moon, colonies on Mars (I say colonies, because colonization describes the claiming of land that is already inhabited, and technically speaking, only robots live on Mars....)

So let's inspire the next generation to lead humanity to a new frontier. Books and movies have the power to change the future, so which would you rather keep seeing? A world where war has claimed the lives of millions and you could die any second under the ruling dictatorship? Or a world -- no, many worlds where humanity has broken free of its roots?

I, for one, choose the latter.

Society tends to achieve the future it expects. Let's face it. We are a pessimistic society because constantly reading about doomsday inevitably makes us lose faith in humanity. We blame the governments, and say that we need to be prepared for when the governments begin acting like the actual societies in the books...but if we can alter our literature and tell stories about humanity's triumphs, society can become optimistic.

Let's fix the problem before it can ignite into a real-world crisis. Begin the change now, and the future won't have to worry. We won't have to fight the government if we can inspire a government filled with people who seek to help humanity -- our species -- take the next great leap. And it's why I write the books I do: I want to help inspire a love for space exploration.

Because we are the human race.

And we are amazing.


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Check out my futuristic YA novel, EMBASSY.
The sequel, RESONANCE, will be available
January 1, 2016.

Friday, October 10, 2014

Some Updates in My Life

I haven't posted in almost two weeks, so I wanted to give some updates going on in my life right now!

First and foremost...I have TWO book signings this weekend in Pittsburgh, right in my coffee shop where I've been hard at work blasting through the sequel to Embassy.


Speaking of the sequel, I hit 60,000 words in Resonance on Wednesday! That puts me well over the halfway mark, and I have about 50,000 words I'd still like to write. Oh, and Part 2 is the same length as Part 1....and I'm expecting at least another 25,000+ words in Part 2. So yeah, it's a loooooong section.


Last weekend, I got to see my puppydog for the first time in about two months. She was very excited, and I'm going to see her again next weekend.



Moving on....a few weeks ago, my roommates and I got two kittens, Onyx and Ollie. Onyx is a black cat, and more importantly, he's MY cat.

Taken at 1:30 a.m. on a Thursday because that's what cat people do

Last, but not least, the Baltimore Orioles are playing the Kansas City Royals today! I've been a die-hard Orioles fan since I was born, so you can imagine how exciting this is to see them sweep Detroit in the ALDS and move on to the ALCS. (Last time they were in the playoffs, the Yankees beat them 3-2 in the ALDS....and the Yankees Suck). So here's to a win against the Royals today!



If you haven't already seen, there's a giveaway going on right now on Goodreads. If you enter, you have a chance to win one of two signed copies of Embassy! (must live in the USA). That giveaway ends October 24. Details are at the top right of this page.

So yeah, that's what's been up with me lately. Life is good, I'm happy (and excited for the book signings tomorrow) and I've gotten some fan mail/sent out signed books to fans across the country! Texas, Michigan, and, believe it or not, Canada! Shout out to you!

If you haven't already, grab a copy of Embassy. It's YA/NA science-fiction. Think Star Trek mixed with John Green. Details can be found HERE.


Monday, September 15, 2014

100-for-100 Challenge

Today marks the first day of the Go Teen Writers 100-for-100 Challenge! From September 15 to December 23, you have to write at least 100 words a day, every day for 100 days. It's a great way to knock out 10,000 words!




Of course, my normal routine is 1,000 words a day, so hopefully I'll finish the first draft of Resonance during these hundred days!


Starting word count: 39,535 words
Goal for Resonance: 110-120,000 words

This is doable!

If you're in Go Teen Writers, what is your goal for the 100 days? If you're not in GTW, contests like this are always good incentive to get writing. Challenge yourself, keep a routine, and watch the words stack up.

Monday, September 1, 2014

Book Signing at Delanie's Coffee in Pittsburgh

On the weekend of October 11-12, I will be selling and signing copies of my New Adult science-fiction novel, EMBASSY, as part of the grand print release event. If you're in Pittsburgh, it's only a five-minute drive from downtown, on the corner of 18th and Carson Streets in the Southside.

Live near Pittsburgh? Join the Facebook event page!
Click this: EMBASSY Book Signing

Come on out, and spread the word!

To learn more about Embassy, Click Here.

To read the latest book review about Embassy, Click Here.
To view the Kindle version of Embassy, Click Here.




Wednesday, August 6, 2014

Is it Necessary to Sexualize Characters in YA Fiction?


Over the last couple days I've seen some comments on Tumblr and elsewhere around the writing world regarding character descriptions. One comment that sticks out in my mind says something along the lines of, "Why do we have to be told if characters are hot or ugly?"

I don't remember the specific details of this person's comment (I've tried finding them again, but with no success), but they went on to say stuff like, "Authors feel the need to say nerdy girls aren't as attractive as popular girls," and "the bad boys are always hot, but the good guys are always geeky and gross." At the end of their comment, they said, "I wish we weren't told how attractive characters are, but just describe what they look like and we'll decide from there."

Let's be honest. Not all authors are guilty of this...but there's something to be said about popular books, particularly books that appeal to teen girls -- and women in general. This could also explain why there are nearly twice as many girls who read than boys.

Think about the last book you read? Chances are, if the main character was a female, there's plenty of description about how hot a guy she meets is, or how sexy Brad-the-football-captain is. You know, descriptions about his arms, chest, legs, and even face. If they hold hands or touch at any point, the FMC probably talks about how firm, yet gentle his grip is.

I'm right, aren't I?

Now let's think about male narrators. (Male narrators? That's an outrage! We need strong female main characters!) Moving on...in my experience reading books like An Abundance of Katherines, 13 Reasons Why, It's Kind of a Funny Story, and a few others, we're told how cute this one girl is, how hot this other girl is, how big this girl's breasts are, how plump this girls lips are...the list goes on and on.

Point is: both genders are guilty of sexualization.



I bet you haven't seen WordArt since the 5th grade.


Let's think about the comments I mentioned above. Why is there a tendency for describe what makes a character attractive? Simple: it should make the character appeal to readers. But think about it: unless you're writing 50 Shades of Gray, is it really necessary to know how hot or ugly a character is? Does it have to be explicitly said, "He's soooo hot, and his muscular biceps are soooo dreamy." (As you can tell, I don't write erotica). Going further, is it necessary to say, "She has the perkiest boobs I've ever seen."

You can argue that these kinds of descriptions are necessary to characterize the main character, that these kinds of thoughts go through people's heads all the time. You'd be right. These thoughts do go through people's heads.

Stay with me.

When it comes to YA fiction, there's a fine line between what's okay, and what's not okay. But in order to determine those, we have to draw a distinct line between contemporary YA fiction and genre YA fiction. I'm defining genre YA fiction as fantasy, science-fiction, paranormal, magical realism, etc etc.





Contemporary YA Fiction
Ex. The Fault in Our Stars, 13 Reasons Why, If I Stay, Fangirl, It's Kind of a Funny Story, The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Looking for Alaska, Eleanor & Park

I think it's easy to say contemporary YA has the longest leash when it comes to sexually explicit material and descriptions. These are stories about realistic teenagers living teenager lives, doing teenager things and thinking teenager thoughts. Thus, we're going to see a lot of description about how hot girls are, how muscular guys are, how sensitive guys are, how soft a girl's breasts are...

You get my point.

This genre of YA...this style of writing can get away with that. It's gritty. It's realistic. The readers can immediately relate to the characters because they act like normal teenagers. Perhaps you've even been to the town the character lives in, like the same books, adore the same celebrities. That's the point of contemporary YA: to show you're not alone, and to explore issues revolving around what being a teenager is like.

In my opinion, the sexualization presented in contemporary YA books is okay and normal. Don't go overboard, but if a teenager can think it, it will show up.





Genre YA Fiction
Ex. Divergent, The Hunger Games, Harry Potter, Eragon, City of Bones, The Maze Runner, Twilight, Matched, Delirium

This is where the line gets drawn. We have to define what is and isn't appropriate for books in these genres. It's a dangerous line that authors must cross carefully.

When it comes to genre fiction, readers aren't coming into the book expecting to read a girl's love life in Small Town, USA. We want an adventure. We want action. We want run-down cities and exotic planets. We want cool guns and serums and magic and death and zombies and monsters and vampires (well, we're getting bored of that).

The point is, we want to escape into a world we can only imagine that will eventually look good on the big screen.

Inevitably, there's a romance brewing in these books. And inevitably, we get to see one character's intimate thoughts about another character. The author, however, has to be careful. Remember, most of us didn't come here for the gushy-gushy makeout session. Most of us are strictly focused on the plot, and we're analyzing how everything that affects the plot.

So when the girl meets the hot guy, we don't want to be bombarded with physical descriptions about the attractiveness of said guy -- usually. It's okay to toss them in there. But remember: in genre fiction, plot is essential.




I recently read a book where the main character -- a girl -- met a literal beast of a man, and all she talked about from there-on-out was how golden his skin was and how wavy his hair was and how warm his chest was, and how big...well...use your imagination.

Uuuuuuugggggghhhhhhh.

Now, maybe it's just because I'm a guy and I don't care about how hot that dream-guy was. But when those physical descriptions started taking over, I started losing interest. Descriptions about how hot this dude was were on every. Other. Page. It took me out of the story, and I ended up glossing through the rest.

Let's return to the original comment at the top of this post: "I wish we weren't told how attractive characters are, but just describe what they look like and we'll decide from there."

I, for one, agree with this statement -- but really only for genre fiction. Contemporary can go do whatever it wants. But whether I'm reading a dystopian novel, a paranormal novel, or a speculative fiction novel, I don't care how hot that girl is or how muscular that guy is, and I think a lot of people feel the same way.

We want to read about the world and events and figure out how the characters will overcome the problems. So create that world, ignite those problems, and develop those characters. Don't give us cardboard cut-outs. Give us human beings (or whatever species your characters are).

Here's a tip: tell us what the characters look like. Hair color, height, if they wear glasses, if they stutter. But don't go to Build-a-Hunk™ and start explaining how hot and sexual this character is. We, as readers, don't want to see your late-night bedroom fantasies.

It's creepy.


Yes, even creepier than Bronies.
So should authors keep it simple? Should genre YA fiction be limited more toward unique traits and features, rather than a fictional Hot-or-Not? Let me know what you think in the comments. Personally, it's okay to toss in a pinch of spice, but don't make it too hot.



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Tuesday, August 5, 2014

10 Motivating Things Writers Should Do

#1. WRITE BECAUSE YOU WANT TO WRITE, NO MATTER WHAT ANYBODY ELSE SAYS

And I mean anybody. Don't let anyone get you down, not your parents, not your friends, not your teachers or that stranger on the internet who probably sits around eating cheetos on a greasy keyboard and can't spell to save his life.

No, writing is about YOU and your life and desires and story. If you have something to say, say it. Never stop. That is the most important thing I have learned. NEVER STOP.




#2. SET OBTAINABLE GOALS, AND GIVE YOURSELF ROOM FOR FLEXIBILITY

On January 1, 2013, I made a New Year's Resolution: write a book by January 14, only two weeks later.

I had personal reasons.

The point is, I met my goal. I finished when I said I would because I knew I could. I had a completed 151,000-word first draft and I couldn't ask for anything else. The feeling was amazing. I was that much closer to being done. Then I set a new goal, to finish editing the second draft by April 1st.

So I took a break, collected myself, and then got back to work. I edited and edited and edited EVERY SINGLE DAY until I was done. I know most people don't have the kind of time I do, but again, the point is to MEET THE GOAL. I actually beat my goal. I finished on March 28th.
My manuscript was reduced to 122,000 words.

Set goals. Meet goals. You will feel WONDERFUL. Completing goals is such a rewarding experience.




#3. START A BLOG AND WRITE USEFUL POSTS

I'm not trying to pat myself on the back. I'm saying blog what you learn, just as you should actively use what you learn. I write from experience. I want to help people, and that is part of what keeps me motivated. If I don't learn, I can't offer advice.




#4. FIND WRITING COMMUNITIES ON FACEBOOK AND OTHER SITES

I happened upon a Facebook page called Go Teen Writers while doing a lazy Google search one day way back in January 2013. Let me tell you something: the people there are fantastic. Everyone helps each other. You'll see comment threads with 20...30...40 comments just to talk about one specific part of writing. And everyone has become, more-or-less, friends. We'll talk about random things, like Harry Potter and what our favorite fantasy land is, and you'll see us posting pictures of our writing spaces and makeshift book covers.

Go Teen Writers is great. Jill and Stephanie do an awesome job, and are always in touch when you want to talk to them. Thank you so much for being awesome!




#5.  MAKE COVER ART, OR DRAW PICTURES FROM YOUR BOOK

What is writing, really? Writing is taking pictures in your head and describing what you, as the author, see. Writing is putting together jumbles of words and creating people and worlds that live inside you.

But words don't always have to be the only way to get those visuals out. Draw. Paint. Photoshop. Whatever you have to do, bring your world to life so other people can see it. Make a cover for your book, even if you don't end up using it. I made my cover in February, and two months later it's the cover of my proof copy and everyone who sees it gives me great feedback.

This is your story. Draw a picture and show us what you see before someone else decides to see it for you.

Eddie Utherwise (click for link)
Copypright 2011 Thomas Taylor


#6.  REVISE...REVISE...EDIT...AND GET CRITIQUED

What's the difference between "revision" and "editing?"

Okay, revision is taking your story and working with the plot, adjusting scenes, changing pace, crafting the story from the first draft...or the second draft...or however many drafts it takes to tell the story how you want it to be told. I've still got lots of work to do tweaking things here and there and making Embassy juuuust right.

Editing is stuff like grammar, punctuation, spelling, finding that missing word...your basic proofreading stuff. Pay attention, and have several pairs of eyes look at your work. Seriously, once you get past the fear of people hating what you write, you'll find that comments and suggestions are the best way of editing and revising a story, and I mean THE BEST way.

If you want to publish a book, that means you want hundreds or thousands of people to see it. So start small and get a general opinion. You'll thank yourself later. And people in writing groups love to help as long as you help them.



#7. TAKE TIME TO YOURSELF...AWAY FROM WRITING

Me? I go for long bike rides alongside Pittsburgh's three rivers. The wind and trees and ducks and geese and sights and people and the Pittsburgh skyline are wonderful. Biking, or going for walks, or sitting in the middle of Market Square lets me empty my mind and just feel at ease. I don't have to think about writing. I don't have to feel stress. I can just be.

Everyone needs a break. Do yourself a favor and do something you love besides writing. Inspiration will come from the simplest places when you aren't even looking, and stick with you when you leave.



#8. TAKE TIME TO BE WITH FRIENDS...AND DON'T TALK ABOUT YOUR WRITING

Unless, of course that's what you and your friends do. But my friends and I will play soccer, or Mario Kart, or Frisbee, or walk Downtown, or grab some coffee or a bite to eat, or watch baseball. Doing this helps you because you can experience society and interaction and guess what? That will help you write better books!



#9. READ, READ, READ, READ, READ

"But I don't have time to read if I'm writing and hanging out with friends!"

Ahem. Excuse me? I think it was Stephen King who said: "If you don't have time to read, you don't have time to write." Why do you want to write? So other people can read what you wrote, and to express yourself.

Study what works. Don't look at one book, look at many. See the various forms, line structures, elements, character interactions, dialogue sequences...everything. Adapt and create your form.

Published books are published for a reason. Successful books are read for a reason. Blockbuster books are known by millions for a reason. That author wrote something that worked.



#10. DON'T EVER BE AFRAID

Yes, this is similar to #1 and is last for reason. I want to leave you thinking: What can I do, and what could I have done? The world of writing is probably the hardest job out there. Success is NEVER guaranteed. Publication is NEVER guaranteed. Writing the next blockbuster NYT Best Seller is NEVER guaranteed. But none of that will ever happen if you don't try.

Get out there and be shameless. If you are writing, make sure people know. I tell everyone I can. Random strangers I meet at the airport, people walking Downtown, my professors, friends, friends of friends....the point is to not care. You'll write better if you know people will read it. If you hide it away all the time and don't let anyone see it, no one is going to care, EVER. It's nerve-racking, telling people you wrote a book. But once they see you've actually written one, they WILL be astounded. I speak from personal experience.


And remember, if you write because you want to, and tell people about it, you'll have readers. If you have readers, they'll help you by offering suggestions and comments. If they're helping you, you're becoming a better writer. If you're becoming a better writer, people will CONTINUE to read what you write.

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Thursday, July 31, 2014

The Most In-Depth Query Letter Advice on the Internet

WARNING: AFTER READING THIS POST, YOU WILL BE A MASTER OF QUERY LETTERS.
*****
*OBLIGATORY EERIE SILENCE*

You may (or may not) have read my other post about query letters: 5 Query Letter Mistakes You Should Avoid. If you haven't read that, I highly recommend you do, because it highlights the common mistakes you don't even know you're making.

Today's post is the opposite of that post. Here, I'm going to show you my own query letter and detail each section, which has gotten 3 partial requests and 2 full requests in the past three months (out of 11 queries sent using this specific letter). I'm still waiting on the fulls.

Let's get to it, shall we? I'll post the whole query letter, then break it apart by sections right afterward so you can see what I did.

Important note: keep the query letter between 250-350 words.

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Scott Martin

Address
Address
Phone #
Email
Website (optional)


Dear Miss/Mr. [agent's last name],


I'm seeking representation for Embassy, my 77,000-word new adult science-fiction novel.

Arman Lance was supposed to travel the galaxy with his father, not watch him die. He was supposed to experience the adventures from his father’s stories, not isolate himself from the world. He was going to join the Embassy Program, fly across the galaxy, and find Ladia Purnell, a girl from another planet whom he loved years before.

Clinging to his fading hopes and dreams, Arman joins the Embassy Program to fulfill that last promise. If he can reach Ladia, he’ll never have to worry, never have to feel alone. But it doesn’t take long for his plan to fall apart when he’s confronted by his fellow Embassy recruit, Glacia Haverns, the ever-smiling adrenaline junkie who decides it’s her job to show Arman there’s more to life than chasing a desperate obsession. Though at first his closed-minded negativity prevails, Arman soon discovers the rewards of opening himself to the experiences he nearly missed.

I have significant background in astronomy and physics and use these elements to present a seamless, scientifically-realistic backdrop to the story. Embassy has a character-driven plot with fierce contemporary YA and NA themes. I bring an authentic voice fueled by the emotions and experiences that teens and college-aged students encounter in their daily lives.

In May, I had the honor of being the Keynote Speaker at a graduation ceremony, in which I was specifically asked to relate the themes of Embassy to the transition from high school to college and other areas of life.

Please note that [agent name] of the [agency name] is currently reading the full manuscript of Embassy. I will notify you if she makes an offer.

Thank you for your consideration. The first ten pages are pasted below.

Sincerely,

S. Alex Martin


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------------------------------  <--keep an eye on this line, it's important later


SECTION ONE

"Scott Martin
Address
Address
Phone #
Email
Website (optional)

Dear Miss/Mr. [agent's last name],"

Not much to say here. Keep it professional, standard business letter format. One thing to note: if the agent is a woman, always put Miss unless you read in her bio (or discover from an outside source) that she is married. Then use Mrs. But when in doubt, just use Miss.

Also, NEVER NEVER NEVER say Dear Agent or neglect the simple courtesy of a greeting. I'm especially looking at anyone who I rant about in my post: (Most) Self-Published Authors are a Bunch of Whiners. Seriously, if you can't take the time to write a personal greeting in a query letter, stay away from the industry, please, and don't complain about agents not recognizing your genius talents.



SECTION TWO

"I'm seeking representation for Embassy, my 77,000-word new adult science-fiction novel."

State your intention. State the title. State the word-count. State the genre. Bing, bang, boom. Done. Leave it at that. Nothing more, nothing less. There's no way you can screw this up, right? That is literally all you have to do. Don't over-complicate things.

I'm getting redundant, so let's move on.


SECTION THREE


"Arman Lance was supposed to travel the galaxy with his father, not watch him die. He was supposed to experience the adventures from his father’s stories, not isolate himself from the world. He was going to join the Embassy Program, fly across the galaxy, and find Ladia Purnell, a girl from another planet whom he loved years before.

Clinging to his fading hopes and dreams, Arman joins the Embassy Program to fulfill that last promise. If he can reach Ladia, he’ll never have to worry, never have to feel alone. But it doesn’t take long for his plan to fall apart when he’s confronted by his fellow Embassy recruit, Glacia Haverns, the ever-smiling adrenaline junkie who decides it’s her job to show Arman there’s more to life than chasing a desperate obsession. Though at first his closed-minded negativity prevails, Arman soon discovers the rewards of opening himself to the experiences he nearly missed."

Okay. Slam on the brakes and enjoy the view, 'cause we're gonna be here a while.

Here we have the body of the query. This is the #1 most vital part of the entire letter, and trust me when I say this will take multiple attempts to perfect.

You always hear tips that say, "Think of this as the back cover description." ....okay? What exactly does that mean. Not many people are gonna go grab the nearest paperback and read the back cover. Here's my advice: GO GRAB THE NEAREST PAPERBACK AND READ THE BACK COVER.

Clear enough?

There are three things the description of your book needs to do:
  1. Introduce the main character
  2. Introduce the main character's current place in life
  3. Introduce the main character's journey
Let me break this down in my query so you can see what I mean:

  • Introduce the main character
  • "Arman Lance..."

Boom. First two words of the description. We know his gender and name. No need for "was just your small-town guy." We need to be concise, so giving the name saves us five words right off the bat.

  • Introduce the main character's current place in life
  • "Arman Lance was supposed to travel the galaxy with his father, not watch him die. He was supposed to experience the adventures from his father’s stories, not isolate himself from the world. He was going to join the Embassy Program, fly across the galaxy, and find Ladia Purnell, a girl from another planet whom he loved years before."
Embassy is a character-driven story. Therefore, I wanted this query to resonate with human emotion and sum up just what Arman is going through so that the reader (in this case, the agent) can connect with him.

We see that Arman had big plans for him and his father--but those plans got cut short. Then we see how he was looking forward to experiencing everything he heard about--but his father's death has a direct impact on his mental state, and he closes up. Suddenly those goals seem impossible. Lastly, we see that he's holding on to one final goal: to see a girl who visited him years earlier.

In three sentences, we understand Arman's current place in life, and the contrasts I present allow us to connect with him on an emotional level, because everyone knows what disappointment and desperate hope feel like.

  • Introduce the main character's journey
  • "Clinging to his fading hopes and dreams, Arman joins the Embassy Program to fulfill that last promise. If he can reach Ladia, he’ll never have to worry, never have to feel alone. But it doesn’t take long for his plan to fall apart when he’s confronted by his fellow Embassy recruit, Glacia Haverns, the ever-smiling adrenaline junkie who decides it’s her job to show Arman there’s more to life than chasing a desperate obsession. Though at first his closed-minded negativity prevails, Arman soon discovers the rewards of opening himself to the experiences he nearly missed."
All right, now we have the bulk of the description, where I detail Arman's journey. The first part of the description, where I introduced Arman's life, was only the first chapter of the book. Now I have to describe the next 30 chapters in one paragraph.

This isn't a synopsis. I'm not detailing every. Single. Thing. The key to an effective journey description is laying out the book's core premise. Let me rephrase that: how will things change? What happens to your main character, how does he react to it, and what road does it take him down?

Easier said than done, right? So do this: PRACTICE. All you have to do is answer that question: how will things change? Focus on the "how." Don't tell the end of the story (save it for the synopsis, if you ever have to write one). All "how" means is "what events lead to the changes?"

Notice how I don't say, "Arman was sad but Glacia helps him be happy again." Yaaaaawn. It doesn't show much of what's actually happening.

Make it interesting. Make it desperate. In my case, I wanted to give agents a sense of who the characters are and how one affects the other.



SECTION FOUR

"I have significant background in astronomy and physics and use these elements to present a seamless, scientifically-realistic backdrop to the story. Embassy has a character-driven plot with fierce contemporary YA and NA themes. I bring an authentic voice fueled by the emotions and experiences that teens and college-aged students encounter in their daily lives.

In May, I had the honor of being the Keynote Speaker at a graduation ceremony, in which I was specifically asked to relate the themes of Embassy to the transition from high school to college and other areas of life."

The author bio. DON'T give your age. I'm 21 years old, but does that matter? No. All that matters is the strength of the writing. In fact, giving your age will either hurt your chances or have no effect. In the end, it's wasted words.

DO tell the agent why you are qualified to write this story. DO give specific examples, like my background in astronomy and physics. DO list any important credentials, awards, and achievements. Think the fact that I was a Keynote Speaker at a graduation ceremony helped? Probably. It shows I'm out there, gaining recognition and developing skills I might need as an author.


SECTION FIVE

"Please note that [agent name] of the [agency name] is currently reading the full manuscript of Embassy. I will notify you if she makes an offer."

If your work is already being looked at by another agent, say so. Don't hide things. Be upfront so the agent is aware of the competition. Agents don't like surprises unless they come in the form of chocolate (or so I'm told).


SECTION SIX

"Thank you for your consideration. The first ten pages are pasted below.

Sincerely,

S. Alex Martin


###"

Finally, we have the closing statements. Always put "Thank you for your consideration." It's just a...well...considerate thing to do. Follow it by assuring the agent the requested material accompanies the submission.

99% of agents want you to paste the material, not attach it. The reason? Viruses. Who's to say you're not a jealous hacker trying to dismantle an agency because they rejected your typo-ridden book three years ago?




Use "Sincerely" or "Regards," or something of that nature. I like "Sincerely." It's just preference.

I always use ### to signify that that part of the query is finished. If there is requested material following, I will include a line of dashes before pasting the material, something like,

"-----------------------------------"

Again, just my preference.

Well, there you go. You have officially read the most in-depth examination of any query letter on the internet. Your move, Writer's Digest.

I hope this helps you develop stronger queries. STUDY THESE TIPS. Every query is different, but you can give yourself an edge by have a stronger, mistake-free query. After you read this post, share it, and then head on over to 5 Query Letter Mistakes You Should Avoid so you can see what gets queries thrown into the trash.

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